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| Topic Started: Jun 28 2008, 12:40 AM (165 Views) | |
| Aeolus | Jun 28 2008, 12:40 AM Post #1 |
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General Information Name: Aeolus Race: Human Age: 15 Description: Aeolus is the sort of person that sticks out in a crowd. He has pale, almost white skin. He has short white hair that stands on end with an occasional stand of yellow hair. He has yellow eyes and a yellow sun tatto on the left side of his neck. He usually wears white clothes and white joggers. With each Chaos Emerald he gets, the more his "tatto" glows. In his Super Form, his body completely glows a bright light, increasing his speed and accuracy. Bio: Aeolus was born in Solaris, the city of water. He was born with the ability to travel at inhuman speed. He was often picked on because on his powers. He was one of the only people who remembered all the events before Chaos Control, which only made the teasing worse, saying he was a liar and crazy. One day, however, he was chosen to become Princess Elise's guard due to his powers, which stopped all the teasing. However, due to the recent increase in villiany, he was sent to stop them. Personality: Aeolus is generally kind and good hearted to people, willing to help those in need. He is loyal and trustworthy, keeping his promises. He likes to attack from afar with his senbon and relax on hot summer days, but will always be ready to protect his friends. He also likes the water, being raised in a place with lots of it, and is a pretty strong swimmer. Alignment: Hero Combat Data Strategic Summary: Aeolus usually attacks from far away with laser attacks or throwing his senbon, but occasionally dashes at extreme speed at an enemy. Signature Attack: Senbon Spin Si. Attack Attributes: Spins on the spot, throwing senbon in every directon. Special Attack: Spinning Senbon Dash Sp. Attack Attributes: Aeolus runs around the enemy at extreme speed, throwing his senbon at a fast pace while running. Chaos Power: Chaos Light Ability Description: Allows him to do multiple light manipulation tricks, increasing duration, number and/or power with each Chaos Emerald, depending on power used. Examples: Lasers, illusions, invisibility, etc. |
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Jun 28 2008, 12:56 AM Post #2 |
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Hmm. Considering the abilities some other characters have, the abilities you've stated in the Bio (Prismatic ability, mesmerancy, invisibility) are unworldly and imbalanced. It would be fine if ONE of these abilities were called as a Chaos Power, but as a human (or any recognisable lifeform), such powers are just too wierd. Inhuman speed - ok, that's not bad, because it's been done, and is feasible (The Flash, Billy Whizz, etc). But the other abilities... The only other cases where the above abilities would be fine is if they were synthetic. ('Invisibility' is stealth camo from MGS. Light control is used in gods-know how many sci-fi weaponry. Mesmerancy is often brought on in narcosis, etc.) The other thing you'd have to think about is why the character has these powers. Think about this a bit. The sheet'll stay wide open. |
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| Aeolus | Jun 28 2008, 01:00 AM Post #3 |
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I'll edit out the invisibilty and illusions but with the powers, it is sort of like Silver and Blaze. He was born with the powers, not given. |
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Jun 28 2008, 01:18 AM Post #4 |
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Yeah, but they're anthropomorphic. Technically, they're aliens (In Sonic Rush [Adventure], Blaze comes from a parallel dimension. In StH2006, herself and Silver come from the future, where just about every hedgehog is psychokinetic). This is the present, and you are a human. We have another character here who is only able to manipulate (extinguish) light by use of her Chaos Emerald. Here's an idea to digest: change your Chaos Power to general light manipulation. That way, you keep your laser-based attacks, and your power to manipulate light. |
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| Aeolus | Jun 28 2008, 01:22 AM Post #5 |
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Fine. |
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Jun 28 2008, 01:26 AM Post #6 |
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...Sorry man, I'm just going with the average* standards of the board. As soon as I see this changed, it'll be hopped to the Accepted department. *Referring to the mathematical term, not the quality. |
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| Aeolus | Jun 28 2008, 01:28 AM Post #7 |
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Jun 28 2008, 01:32 AM Post #8 |
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"Fire One!" Application destroys wall of Accepted Department and sits at top of list. |
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